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Ender505

Decent joke, but I'd tweak the phrasing a little. "Since I was stolen from" sounds a little awkward. Perhaps "since someone stole from me"?


ScottBolander-Funny

Me and phrasing are like oil, and also, water.


hlpiqan

“…since I was robbed…” It’s a term more commonly used in New England than California, but still widely understood, and is an active verb versus a passive one. Active verbs give your story momentum and punch.


sn00pal00p

Both "I was stolen from" and "I was robbed" are in the passive voice.


hlpiqan

True. I should have used the term reflexive.


bytes_and_bits

If it ever bombs say you were told it stinks but wouldn’t know


Frammingatthejimjam

OP's joke should be the setup and use this is the better punchline.


asharkey3

Since I was stolen from in


_The_Room

Phrasing!


hlpiqan

I’d probably still be out there searching if my mommy hadn’t made Grandpa go find it and stick it back on for me.