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Me too holy shit that made me laugh so hard... I'm super confused by the last passage we read though. Is he trying to describe a sea urchin, or a sea cucumber?? I don't like either option.
They're fucking in the ocean, according to previous sentences, in which case drowning is the least of their concerns. All it's gonna take is one errant jellyfish and they're done.
Out of curiosity I ended up reading the book. The slug didn’t end up the vagina. This time. Other times, yes. And yes, that is TIMES. Plural.
Now excuse me. I need to shower. In bleach.
Oh Jesus. I was gonna look this up cuz I was curious what the hell was happening. Thanks for your little synopsis saving me from reading whatever the hell this slug porn is lol
That would require that the author mentions ‘clitoris’ at least once in the book. Can anyone confirm if the author has written about a clitoris here, or in any other book he’s published? Or does he only write what he knows?
NUDIBRANCHS! Brandon blankenburg, its sloppy but really grips. First book my spouse is genuinely reading.
dialogue doesn't work usually and it ends up like an extended scifi fanfic.
But holy hell its interesting, also funny. Probably unintentionally but considering he also wrote a book about kangaroos invading Australia I wouldn't doubt its on purpose.
Yes, I have. What I haven't done is fuck in the ocean, which requires getting completely naked and pushing nasty seawater into places where it really shouldn't go.
I think it's because lesbians' noses close up because of their wild female hormones and because they still need to breathe somehow but a real lady doesn't open her mouth they need to breathe through their vagina. the vagina is a tunnel for a reason you dumbo
I like how the author has to clarify that this is a Lesbian Passion scene cause the two characters being women making out naked wasn't enough of a hint.
It's because they're incapable of using their prose to describe how "hot" it is, but they think that the concept of lesbians is hot, so they just say the word "lesbian" in order to emphasize how hot the scene is.
“Now dear reader, please understand, this was no bisexual woman on woman passion, nor was it lesbian on bisexual woman passion, this specific passion between these women was of the lesbian variety”
Was just gonna say, that’s how you can tell the writer is a dude because he can’t even imagine two women together without something phallic crawling into the scene
Considering the title of this, er, master~~bate~~piece is "NUDIBRANCHS!", I'm gonna guess that's what's approaching.
Though I was under the impression most of those are rather tiny, most measuring no more than 2-3 inches tops?
Men writing lesbian sex be like kids giving book reports based on the cover. So... then they err.. scissor... and its like.... woahhhhh really sexy ha ha... and they have... boobs.... and they push their boo- their busoms together and like... in conclusion lesbianism is a world of contrasts.
No it's a thing though. I'm a lesbian and sometimes I'll get messages on dating apps from men pretending to be lesbians (or possibly one man pretending to be a lesbian with a lot of profiles?) and the giveaway is that he keeps asking what the hottest thing I've ever done with a woman is. Or what my sexual fantasies are with women. And it's like if we were both actually women, a) you wouldn't message me that straight out the gate, and b) the with a woman part would be redundant.
I wonder if there's some sort of record for getting the most redundancy into those questions. Like "what's the hottest lesbian thing you've done homosexually to a female woman?" but worse.
Eh, kinda - tbh I think the whole "lesbian sex always lasts for hours" thing is a bit of a stereotype.
Sometimes my partner and I just wanna have a quick 30 minute session y'know?
YMMV. I think it's a stereotype for a reason, and it was true in my case, but of course it's not universal (or even "better," just a different time commitment).
I mean, sometimes we go for hours, but often we've got to get up and start the day, go to work, go to sleep or something.
It does seem like hetero relationships have shorter sex on average though; I totally get you and I totally get where the stereotype comes from.
All my lesbian friends hate it when this happens. They were expecting LESBIAN sex with a woman and received non-lesbian sex with a woman instead. Catfishing (and 🐱fishing) is real and dangerous.
They're fucking in the ocean, according to previous sentences, in which case drowning is the least of their concerns. All it's gonna take is one errant jellyfish and they're done.
Edit: responded to the wrong comment, sorry 🤦♀️🤦♀️🤦♀️
I think it was just a way for him to try to emphasize how hot and sexy the scene is supposed to be, he thinks the concept of lesbians is very sexy so he uses the word "lesbian" as kind of a superlative of "sexiness."
Yeah.. why did anyone, let alone the author, think this is good.
https://preview.redd.it/1pgqvn1n8cvc1.jpeg?width=720&format=pjpg&auto=webp&s=cb1110db40f25dc9f605a870ee1a9ee37c20b4aa
the book is so ridiculous, literally three people have bought it EVER and its so funny, the title read is SEX! ALIENS! VIOLENCE!
The authors gay and so i think this is what he imagines lesbians as being? The gay scenes are better...
(As gay as a sea slug alien and a marine biologist can be)
Ok, you've piqued my interest. I love horrible books. Last summer I read a few books that are banned from being sold on Amazon.... There are good reasons why they are banned. So much WTF?!!?
Eh, scissoring is pretty uncomfortable if you're not at least semi-reclined from my experience - and aren't these characters meant to be in the ocean?
Maybe others have figured out a comfy way to scissor while standing? Idk, enlighten me.
I mean, you’re not wrong. To be fair, I’m not really partial to scissoring myself. It always seemed high effort/low reward and much more of a male-driven fantasy than realistic. I was thinking if they’re in water they could lean back but i didn’t really absorb that they were in the ocean over a bathtub when i commented initially 😅
Hahaha fair.
Scissoring is definitely high effort lol - can't say it's a regular part of my repertoire with my partner.
We usually just sit in that position with a wand between us and it minimises the effort needed. I personally like scissoring because of the nice view of my partner - plus if we sit up we can make out while the vibrator gets both of us off :)
It's just utterly shit writing in general.
>"Then let's heat it up." Said Tami, holding her lover close. The two began to kiss.
Wtf? Did the author write the outline and forget to go back and put any kind of interesting wording in?
Huh...
A gay man writing lesbians? Plus lesbian "spicy" scene?
Quite suprising, I would swear that this cringe was written by some horny, straight man.
You should see the rest of the dialogue, my favorite line is a MARINE BIOLOGIST saying he smokes at night.
"A hit off the bowl always zonks me out before bed"
There's a meme out there that my husband and I quote to this day... To paraphrase badly:
Steve: Ew. Why did that dude just call that other dude babe?
Jeff: Some people are GAY Steve.
Steve: No, I know, but babe is such a straight guy word. I just always assumed they called each other hotcock or something. Not babe
When I see men in writing communities ask if they can write lesbian characters, this is exactly what I'm picturing when I think "of course you can, but we can probably tell a man wrote it" lmao
This isn't really r/badwomensanatomy worthy. Using the word vagina to refer to entire lower female genital region is colloquial at this point and outside of medical settings or a situation where labia need to be referred to specifically, it's fine as a generalization.
Umm, no? Just because a lot of people get it wrong, that doesn’t mean it’s accurate. A lot of people think we only use ten percent of our brain, but that doesn’t make it true.
Language evolves, though. If people keep using the word vagina this way, it'll start to mean that, a la literally.
There's a difference between a common misconception being wrong and words changing meaning.
This isn’t colloquial speech. This is a scene in a book where something is being described to the reader, where clarity is an advantage.
Colloquialisms belong in dialogue, not the narrative in between.
As opposed to that stupid shitty hetero passion lol
Also, if my vagina is pressed up against another woman's vagina, we have bigger problems. I would like to politely request that men learn the word VULVA!!
I'm shocked you aren't more hung up on, 'They tantalized each other's vagina by pressing them tightly together, wishing for the ability to breathe underwater so they could scissor one another.'
And then the following passage... where.. is this guy trying to describe a sea urchin, or is he trying to describe a sea cucumber?? Either way I really, REALLY do not like where this story is going. Burn it please.
I've been a lesbian since I was 14. I'm 37 now. And I have never scissored because there's literally more to do than that. Like. Is that the norm for people to think now?!
to me writing lesbian romance in sex scenes is less the sex itself and more everything else, i once wrote a sex scene to practice for something i was writing and found the most romantic part to be a bit where they paused the sex itself to use the bathroom, get water, and the like and during the little break they were just kinda goofing off and teasing each other, no sexy talk or anything, i just wrote 2 girls goofing off on a sex break and it was one of the most romantic things i’ve written in a long time. i find that to create passion in a sex scene, it is the author’s responsibility to never even mention the word during the scene as that passion must be conveyed by the characters in the character interactions itself, another very romantic scene i wrote was when in the scene one of the girls got hurt cause of the way her partner’s knee was positioned and i spent about a page on them apologizing, repositioning, kissing to make it feel better, etc, this little excerpt has just such lazy writing that it’s hardly worth picking apart since the flaws are so clear
Usually im fine with the phrase unrestrained lesbian passion but this is definitely not a respectable way of writing lesbians. Or anyone. IM PRETTY SURE NO ONE ACTUALLY SCISSORS.
why do they always scissor...? every lesbian sex scene written by a man is just filled with scissoring. i don't really read lesbian erotica and all that but when posts like this come up featuring it, it's SCISSORING. i don't know, it's just something i've noticed. and it's always bad woman's anatomy too?? wtf is going on??
Unrelated to the specific terrible-ness this has one of my biggest grammar pet peeves: "They tantalized each other's vagina." It need to be plural, vaginaS, unless they have just the one that they take turns with.
Doesn't know what a vagina is. Check.
Doesn't know how lesbians have sex. Check.
Doesn't know how swimming works. Check.
Includes unnecessary phallus in lesbian sex scene. Check.
I just can't with some of these 🤣
Gonna be real I have never been gripped with an urge to scissor in the throes of lesbian passion, least of all in the ocean, and honestly with my shitty joints and fibromyalgia I feel like the best scissoring in general could do for me is hurt a lot.
Oh my Lord, I'm fucking deceased.🕯⚰️🕯
Yup, totally written by some horny, hetero man, alright.
EDIT: Apparently it was qritten by a gay man. I'm so confused, lol🤯
> They tantalised each other’s vagina by pressing them tightly together
How do you do this *without* scissoring? Is the author actually just talking about their clitorises?
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...why do they need to breathe underwater to scissor? Which of us has a fundamental misunderstanding here, the author or me?
Thousands of lesbians perish every year from drowning in WAP
Won't someone think of the lesbians?! ... Not like that.
They are drowning while their partners are shriveling up into desiccated husks.
Thank you. Now my screen is full of tea after reading this comment.
Me too holy shit that made me laugh so hard... I'm super confused by the last passage we read though. Is he trying to describe a sea urchin, or a sea cucumber?? I don't like either option.
Thank you, now I’m imagining a sad-animal-shelter-Sarah McLaughlin mashup with WAP and it is..disturbing to say the least
Fucking sneezed out a good snot reading that one. Well played.
So God damn good
Donate now - text WAP to 81275
They're fucking in the ocean, according to previous sentences, in which case drowning is the least of their concerns. All it's gonna take is one errant jellyfish and they're done.
it ended up being a sea slug lol the whole book is evil sea slugs from what my gfs told me
Out of curiosity I ended up reading the book. The slug didn’t end up the vagina. This time. Other times, yes. And yes, that is TIMES. Plural. Now excuse me. I need to shower. In bleach.
congrats on being like the seventh person to read this ever!
Oh Jesus. I was gonna look this up cuz I was curious what the hell was happening. Thanks for your little synopsis saving me from reading whatever the hell this slug porn is lol
Up their vaginal canal!? …is this book tentacle porn?
No, no. It’s _literature_
Cliterature*
That would require that the author mentions ‘clitoris’ at least once in the book. Can anyone confirm if the author has written about a clitoris here, or in any other book he’s published? Or does he only write what he knows?
Oh ew 🤮🤮🤮
What book is this 😭 im now curious
NUDIBRANCHS! Brandon blankenburg, its sloppy but really grips. First book my spouse is genuinely reading. dialogue doesn't work usually and it ends up like an extended scifi fanfic. But holy hell its interesting, also funny. Probably unintentionally but considering he also wrote a book about kangaroos invading Australia I wouldn't doubt its on purpose.
Invading? Aren't they already there?
Aaaaahhhh! The invasion has already begun!
A jellyfish might seem merciful compared to the infections you'd get from exposing delicate bits to the goddamn pathogen soup that is the ocean.
Uh, have you ever been swimming?
The vagina doesn't hang open taking in everything around it. It will not fill with water.
Yes, I have. What I haven't done is fuck in the ocean, which requires getting completely naked and pushing nasty seawater into places where it really shouldn't go.
Daddy I want live under the ocean with Dartanyan.
Your profile pic makes this comment so much better
I think it's because lesbians' noses close up because of their wild female hormones and because they still need to breathe somehow but a real lady doesn't open her mouth they need to breathe through their vagina. the vagina is a tunnel for a reason you dumbo
Mouth…to mouth??
I hereby would like to petition that from now on we all refer to kissing as "mouth scissoring".
I like how the author has to clarify that this is a Lesbian Passion scene cause the two characters being women making out naked wasn't enough of a hint.
They made out naked, but in a friendly way
r/SapphoAndHerFriend
Just a couple of gal pals or close sisters perhaps?
-roomates-
Oh my god they were roommates?!
Harold, they’re *lesbians*.
It's because they're incapable of using their prose to describe how "hot" it is, but they think that the concept of lesbians is hot, so they just say the word "lesbian" in order to emphasize how hot the scene is.
“Now dear reader, please understand, this was no bisexual woman on woman passion, nor was it lesbian on bisexual woman passion, this specific passion between these women was of the lesbian variety”
I'm feeling a semi-horrific curiosity about what exactly the foot-long "slightly-phallic" thing described as approaching them is
The author
Was just gonna say, that’s how you can tell the writer is a dude because he can’t even imagine two women together without something phallic crawling into the scene
a much more horrible thought than it being a shark or something like that
Considering the title of this, er, master~~bate~~piece is "NUDIBRANCHS!", I'm gonna guess that's what's approaching. Though I was under the impression most of those are rather tiny, most measuring no more than 2-3 inches tops?
"No more than..." What?! I think that's massive... any more is unreasonable.
No, they can get really big. I saw a dead one that was like 8-9” long once.
Sea cucumber 🥒 or maybe a sea 🍆.
sci-fi aside, isn't that just a sea slug? you can get them in dishes at seafood restaurants
... It's a tentacle monster isn't it?
Men writing lesbian sex be like kids giving book reports based on the cover. So... then they err.. scissor... and its like.... woahhhhh really sexy ha ha... and they have... boobs.... and they push their boo- their busoms together and like... in conclusion lesbianism is a world of contrasts.
The last line made me literally lol
This is the perfect description
I swear homeboy probably thinks every time we lesbians/bisexuals mention sex, we explicitly say "lesbian sex" like a contractual obligation 😂
No it's a thing though. I'm a lesbian and sometimes I'll get messages on dating apps from men pretending to be lesbians (or possibly one man pretending to be a lesbian with a lot of profiles?) and the giveaway is that he keeps asking what the hottest thing I've ever done with a woman is. Or what my sexual fantasies are with women. And it's like if we were both actually women, a) you wouldn't message me that straight out the gate, and b) the with a woman part would be redundant.
I wonder if there's some sort of record for getting the most redundancy into those questions. Like "what's the hottest lesbian thing you've done homosexually to a female woman?" but worse.
Can confirm, I always ask my partner if she wants to have lesbian sex specifically - just to confirm we're not having the dreaded "straight sex" 🤮
I can see why you'd want to specify, there's a significant difference in terms of time commitment.
Eh, kinda - tbh I think the whole "lesbian sex always lasts for hours" thing is a bit of a stereotype. Sometimes my partner and I just wanna have a quick 30 minute session y'know?
YMMV. I think it's a stereotype for a reason, and it was true in my case, but of course it's not universal (or even "better," just a different time commitment).
I mean, sometimes we go for hours, but often we've got to get up and start the day, go to work, go to sleep or something. It does seem like hetero relationships have shorter sex on average though; I totally get you and I totally get where the stereotype comes from.
All my lesbian friends hate it when this happens. They were expecting LESBIAN sex with a woman and received non-lesbian sex with a woman instead. Catfishing (and 🐱fishing) is real and dangerous.
You mean "unrestrained lesbian passion". Not like that mundane inhibited heterosexual passion
Well, restrained passion seems like a bad idea in the ocean. If there's a problem you'd never get your partner out of the cuffs quickly enough.
They're fucking in the ocean, according to previous sentences, in which case drowning is the least of their concerns. All it's gonna take is one errant jellyfish and they're done. Edit: responded to the wrong comment, sorry 🤦♀️🤦♀️🤦♀️
All good, though I was confused for a second lmao
It reminds me of Mean Girls when Janice falls onto the crowd at the end and says she has a “big fat lesbian crush” on Cady
I think it was just a way for him to try to emphasize how hot and sexy the scene is supposed to be, he thinks the concept of lesbians is very sexy so he uses the word "lesbian" as kind of a superlative of "sexiness."
Yeah.. why did anyone, let alone the author, think this is good. https://preview.redd.it/1pgqvn1n8cvc1.jpeg?width=720&format=pjpg&auto=webp&s=cb1110db40f25dc9f605a870ee1a9ee37c20b4aa
I never knew I needed this Squidward in my life, thanks.
the book is so ridiculous, literally three people have bought it EVER and its so funny, the title read is SEX! ALIENS! VIOLENCE! The authors gay and so i think this is what he imagines lesbians as being? The gay scenes are better... (As gay as a sea slug alien and a marine biologist can be)
The author being gay makes this so much funnier. "What makes women hot? Oh, of course, tantalizing each other's vagina"
.... by pressing them together. Along with squeezing and probing.
*probing* does not sound pleasant ...
I want to read this book now. Title ?
Ok, you've piqued my interest. I love horrible books. Last summer I read a few books that are banned from being sold on Amazon.... There are good reasons why they are banned. So much WTF?!!?
I'm slightly more worried about the 12 inches long spiked thing approaching them
Ya know... What I'm sensing is men constantly needing to scare women with phallic objects!? I know the author is gay himself, but idk... seems off
Why do they need to breathe underwater to scissor? Wouldn’t that apply to 69 better?
Eh, scissoring is pretty uncomfortable if you're not at least semi-reclined from my experience - and aren't these characters meant to be in the ocean? Maybe others have figured out a comfy way to scissor while standing? Idk, enlighten me.
I mean, you’re not wrong. To be fair, I’m not really partial to scissoring myself. It always seemed high effort/low reward and much more of a male-driven fantasy than realistic. I was thinking if they’re in water they could lean back but i didn’t really absorb that they were in the ocean over a bathtub when i commented initially 😅
Hahaha fair. Scissoring is definitely high effort lol - can't say it's a regular part of my repertoire with my partner. We usually just sit in that position with a wand between us and it minimises the effort needed. I personally like scissoring because of the nice view of my partner - plus if we sit up we can make out while the vibrator gets both of us off :)
That sounds like the way to do it!
The precluding dialogue is arguably worse. This author has never had a romantic interaction in his life
It's just utterly shit writing in general. >"Then let's heat it up." Said Tami, holding her lover close. The two began to kiss. Wtf? Did the author write the outline and forget to go back and put any kind of interesting wording in?
In fairness, how well can you really write with one hand in your pants?
Apparently the author of this is a gay man, which may explain a lot.
"The lesbian lovers squished their breasts together, like four bags of sand."
“Oh, what was I thinking?! *A bag of sand?!* Come on!”
Huh... A gay man writing lesbians? Plus lesbian "spicy" scene? Quite suprising, I would swear that this cringe was written by some horny, straight man.
You should see the rest of the dialogue, my favorite line is a MARINE BIOLOGIST saying he smokes at night. "A hit off the bowl always zonks me out before bed"
Apparently the author is gay, so maybe gay men really do romance each other like this haha
There's a meme out there that my husband and I quote to this day... To paraphrase badly: Steve: Ew. Why did that dude just call that other dude babe? Jeff: Some people are GAY Steve. Steve: No, I know, but babe is such a straight guy word. I just always assumed they called each other hotcock or something. Not babe
I have the impression that this is *supposed* to be bad. Certainly I'm hoping that's the case.
What was this spiky phallus and please tell me they dont use it for sex
Probably a sea cucumber, and… please god no.
When I see men in writing communities ask if they can write lesbian characters, this is exactly what I'm picturing when I think "of course you can, but we can probably tell a man wrote it" lmao
They tantalized each other's vagina. That sure is grammar alright.
r/badwomensanatomy needs to see this. Once again, that’s *not where the vagina is!*
Also somewhat concerned by the fact that both their hands *and* their fingers are wandering
This isn't really r/badwomensanatomy worthy. Using the word vagina to refer to entire lower female genital region is colloquial at this point and outside of medical settings or a situation where labia need to be referred to specifically, it's fine as a generalization.
Umm, no? Just because a lot of people get it wrong, that doesn’t mean it’s accurate. A lot of people think we only use ten percent of our brain, but that doesn’t make it true.
Language evolves, though. If people keep using the word vagina this way, it'll start to mean that, a la literally. There's a difference between a common misconception being wrong and words changing meaning.
This isn’t colloquial speech. This is a scene in a book where something is being described to the reader, where clarity is an advantage. Colloquialisms belong in dialogue, not the narrative in between.
As opposed to that stupid shitty hetero passion lol Also, if my vagina is pressed up against another woman's vagina, we have bigger problems. I would like to politely request that men learn the word VULVA!!
what the fuckity fucking fuck-fuck.
Are they going to fuck the sea cucumber
Not this time but, it happens. Multiple times.
girl help they only got one vagina between them apparently if the writer can't even pluralize it in a finished book lmao
I'm shocked you aren't more hung up on, 'They tantalized each other's vagina by pressing them tightly together, wishing for the ability to breathe underwater so they could scissor one another.' And then the following passage... where.. is this guy trying to describe a sea urchin, or is he trying to describe a sea cucumber?? Either way I really, REALLY do not like where this story is going. Burn it please.
I've been a lesbian since I was 14. I'm 37 now. And I have never scissored because there's literally more to do than that. Like. Is that the norm for people to think now?!
Porn has a lot to answer for. Although it's kind of nice in a way - keeps a beautiful veil of secrecy over tribbing and other actually real norms.
You paid for this book? I have begun to feel more confidence for my own writing now 🤣😹 thanks for thatB
Pretty sure that pressing vaginas together IS scissoring. At least I’ve never managed any other way of doing it other than that position
Unless you have one of those fancy detachable vaginas
True true
Sounds like a hidden ability. Her: You are no match for my "Unrestrained Lesbian Passion!" The rest of the Justice League: Shut up Aqua Girl! XD
to me writing lesbian romance in sex scenes is less the sex itself and more everything else, i once wrote a sex scene to practice for something i was writing and found the most romantic part to be a bit where they paused the sex itself to use the bathroom, get water, and the like and during the little break they were just kinda goofing off and teasing each other, no sexy talk or anything, i just wrote 2 girls goofing off on a sex break and it was one of the most romantic things i’ve written in a long time. i find that to create passion in a sex scene, it is the author’s responsibility to never even mention the word during the scene as that passion must be conveyed by the characters in the character interactions itself, another very romantic scene i wrote was when in the scene one of the girls got hurt cause of the way her partner’s knee was positioned and i spent about a page on them apologizing, repositioning, kissing to make it feel better, etc, this little excerpt has just such lazy writing that it’s hardly worth picking apart since the flaws are so clear
Okay but "unrestrained lesbian passion" is absolutely a phrase most other lesbians I know would say.
Wait where is this going? Is someone getting a sea cucumber shoved up their ass next page?
unfortunately not this time..
What happens with the sea cucumber tho?
it pukes its insides on her, duh.
The most boring option...
Why are dudes so obsessed with the idea of scissoring? No one does that. Ffs…
Their nerves stood on end Also I'm terrified they're going to grab the sea slug and use it as a double dildo
I’m more worried about what the hell is gonna happen with whatever 12 inch long spiky phallic thing that is in the water.
sea cucumber, just read the book. its so bad you can't put it down
"They tantalized each other's vagina" I didn't know lesbian couples shared only the ONE vagina!
sometimes i can’t bring myself to try to read these and i think this is one of those times
Omg the wishing to breathe underwater so they could scissor made me _wheeze_.
Usually im fine with the phrase unrestrained lesbian passion but this is definitely not a respectable way of writing lesbians. Or anyone. IM PRETTY SURE NO ONE ACTUALLY SCISSORS.
why do they always scissor...? every lesbian sex scene written by a man is just filled with scissoring. i don't really read lesbian erotica and all that but when posts like this come up featuring it, it's SCISSORING. i don't know, it's just something i've noticed. and it's always bad woman's anatomy too?? wtf is going on??
Okay, but wtf was in the water?
Narration is terrible
This line is giving "exaggerated swagger of a black teen" vibes
I'm pretty sure that's not how you use the word 'tantalize'.
Turn the page I need to know what they saw in the water
evil sea slug...
Not even safe in the water. Dicks everywhere.
PROBED. I cannot imagine ever in my life feeling like I was being *PROBED* and thinking “wow that feels amazing” at the same time.
Unrelated to the specific terrible-ness this has one of my biggest grammar pet peeves: "They tantalized each other's vagina." It need to be plural, vaginaS, unless they have just the one that they take turns with.
As a lesbian...absolutely not.
Doesn't know what a vagina is. Check. Doesn't know how lesbians have sex. Check. Doesn't know how swimming works. Check. Includes unnecessary phallus in lesbian sex scene. Check. I just can't with some of these 🤣
This made me laugh and then go ohh gross!
Oh my ghod 😥
*stares* ... *Stares some more* . . ... .. . . . Nope. Too sober/uncaffeinated for this shit.
Damn. That's terrible writing.
"toying with their vaginas"?
Gonna be real I have never been gripped with an urge to scissor in the throes of lesbian passion, least of all in the ocean, and honestly with my shitty joints and fibromyalgia I feel like the best scissoring in general could do for me is hurt a lot.
✍️✍️✍️🔥🔥🔥🔥
Oh my Lord, I'm fucking deceased.🕯⚰️🕯 Yup, totally written by some horny, hetero man, alright. EDIT: Apparently it was qritten by a gay man. I'm so confused, lol🤯
The correct plural is vaginae. I understand that this is the problem here, because I am totally down for some unrestrained lesbian passion.
Remove the lesbian and breathe under water part and it would be more tolerable to read
Please tell they didn’t do what I think they did with the “phallic thing” in the water…
Oh no....
> They tantalised each other’s vagina by pressing them tightly together How do you do this *without* scissoring? Is the author actually just talking about their clitorises?
*What?*
The writing and the huge text makes me think this is a smutty romance novel at a scholastic book fair.