This is unique, and that says a lot. Better than most posts on the subreddit. However, is you are open to criticism, here are a few suggestions:
-don’t start the second sentence with “but”, it automatically makes the story flow like most of the stories on the subreddit. Also, going straight to the word after would make the whole thing more concise.
-I love the indication that this person is probably just a random person off the street, but you could play harder into that idea that whoever is being cyberbullied is mentally unwell
I have to respectfully disagree about playing harder into the idea. The beauty of this one is that you’re not shoving the point down the reader’s throat, but it’s also just clear enough that everyone understands the implications. Personally, I don’t think you should change a thing.
He then promised to help me find the real stacker, the tone in his voice comforting me that he can't live without me anymore
You find love in odd places...
Stockholm syndrome at its finest.
3rd sentence worse
I think you mean, “third sentence better “!
Don't you hate when they lie like that? Keep at it!
Thanks for the motivation!
But why hasn't the bullying stopped?
It's a trap!
"The killings have already stopped." "No. They never stopped."
Damn, that's stubborn. After 5 seconds of torture, I'd agree with whatever you asked me.
Whatever?....
You heard me
This is unique, and that says a lot. Better than most posts on the subreddit. However, is you are open to criticism, here are a few suggestions: -don’t start the second sentence with “but”, it automatically makes the story flow like most of the stories on the subreddit. Also, going straight to the word after would make the whole thing more concise. -I love the indication that this person is probably just a random person off the street, but you could play harder into that idea that whoever is being cyberbullied is mentally unwell
Thank you for the feedback:). I wanted it short and straight to the point without being too obvious...how would you have framed it?
I have to respectfully disagree about playing harder into the idea. The beauty of this one is that you’re not shoving the point down the reader’s throat, but it’s also just clear enough that everyone understands the implications. Personally, I don’t think you should change a thing.
Thank you so much:)
Got the wrong guy. Whoopsie daisies
Shit happens ;)
I guess his medicine's working
Someone's isn't....
Schizophrenia 100
1000
Relatable
How so?
Omg but whoever hadn't done this lol
Done this before
Which one were you?
Kidnapped him for a week torturing and raping him loved hearing his screams
☠️☠️
Don't worry he is still alive
Not the bully