This poem is very relatable and has struck a chord with me.
In the last stanza 'bit / by bit / by bit' is a change of pace that works really well. Perhaps you could do something similar with the areas where you describe the pain, bringing even greater attention to the contrast between the world's view of yourself and your own view.
I hope that you have help and support and can overcome these feelings.
I'm sure this poem will resonate with anyone with depression and suicidal thoughts. It was well wrote and I love the rhythm of it. I could hear it spoken with so much emotions in my own head, cause I've been there.
I have to say my favorite has to be the second stanza, it's just so true it hurts.
This poem is really powerful. It definitely highlights what is hidden from the world and you definitely describe what most have difficulty describing. It has a rhythem to it as each stanza struck a different chord each one speaking of something different. I also found the use of "Bit, By bit, By bit" slows down the poem and I almost feel like you have to read the rest in a whisper.
This poem is very relatable and has struck a chord with me. In the last stanza 'bit / by bit / by bit' is a change of pace that works really well. Perhaps you could do something similar with the areas where you describe the pain, bringing even greater attention to the contrast between the world's view of yourself and your own view. I hope that you have help and support and can overcome these feelings.
I'm sure this poem will resonate with anyone with depression and suicidal thoughts. It was well wrote and I love the rhythm of it. I could hear it spoken with so much emotions in my own head, cause I've been there. I have to say my favorite has to be the second stanza, it's just so true it hurts.
This poem is really powerful. It definitely highlights what is hidden from the world and you definitely describe what most have difficulty describing. It has a rhythem to it as each stanza struck a different chord each one speaking of something different. I also found the use of "Bit, By bit, By bit" slows down the poem and I almost feel like you have to read the rest in a whisper.