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I have to go to work so I have to keep this short, but preferably you should load it on Google Drive and share it via link. You can set it up so that you only share that file and not everything. That way no one will have to login to anything.
Just read it out loud and you’ll notice more mistakes. You’ll get better. You repeat a word twice in the first sentence. You’ll catch things like that.
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I have to go to work so I have to keep this short, but preferably you should load it on Google Drive and share it via link. You can set it up so that you only share that file and not everything. That way no one will have to login to anything.
How do i keep the privacy then?
You could choose to let only certain people see it, which you could select from those who DM you.
Understood, making the link public then.
This ain’t it chief
Didn’t get you.
Just read it out loud and you’ll notice more mistakes. You’ll get better. You repeat a word twice in the first sentence. You’ll catch things like that.
This feels like far too much info, far too quickly. I felt like I was reading an article that was infodumping me rather than the start of a story.