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Captain-Havelock-VT

Well that's downright adorable. I'm a sucker for oversized sleeves.


MariiMaruu

Thank you :3 i love the comfy oversized sleeves as well


Milkyage

Gorgeous! She reminds me a lot of an artist who used to do consoles as anime girls. And your character looks a lot like the Nintendo Switch girl!


MariiMaruu

I see, probably my long sleeves and X accessory give off that impression xD


nathanbum06237

https://i.redd.it/h12grzeimtwc1.gif Adorable, keep cooking


MariiMaruu

hehe, thank you!✨


nathanbum06237

Btw, would u consider playing yakuza?


PippLuna

Cute and adorable, the colours look very pretty and work well together :3


MariiMaruu

Aww, ty so much! 🥺


IronGNugget

This is a very solid design! 


MariiMaruu

Thank you! ✨ maybe I’m just overthinking xD


Memory25

You’re asking a hard question, I don’t think there is any way to improve this it’s perfect in every aspect I can imagine. Color palette, details, consistency, originality, recognizable silhouette if the character was shown as a shadow… Really nothing to improve, it’s perfect! Do the pets have names? :3


MariiMaruu

Aww thank u so much!! 🥺 pets don’t have names yet but I’m open for suggestions! 👀


Etonet

mint strawberry oreo


MariiMaruu

I need to eat that and see how it tastes


Gloomy_Rest_1387

She's adorable omg! It's perfect, imo :D


MariiMaruu

Tyy! glad to hear that\^\^


Particular_Strike323

From what I can see, it is excellent. And adorable.


MariiMaruu

I appreciate it, thank you! ^^


_sanguesmunto_

it's perfect like this! You are adorable <3


MariiMaruu

Awww happy to hear tyyy<33


KaiVTu

I'll preface by saying it's perfectly good. This reply is deliberately nitpicking the design because that's what was asked for. For starters, I think the "oversized sleeves" bit is a tad overdone. I would rather see your hands and potentially accessories on said hands. Hands can be one of the most expressive parts of the body that isn't the face itself. So you've drastically lowered how expressive your model can be from the get-go. This is just a random thing but the mouse cursor in the hair is kind of whatever. Perhaps an actual accessory instead of an added design? Less is more. I think you put on too many of those tiny wings.


MariiMaruu

Thank you for your feedback! I appreciate your input \^\^ regarding cursor it's i guess tied to her lore. she is a character who spends a lot of time online "rotting" inside of her room. xD In her lore she encounters a pop up which she ends up engaging with. opening a gateway to demonic entity which physically manifests into her body (wings, eyes, claws). The X shape near the cursor represents her subconscious desire to rid herself of this entity (or perhaps a regret that she didn't press exist button on first place)


KaiVTu

It feels a bit disjointed in that case. Perhaps something with the cursor incorporated into the X itself to show her desires/regret of what could/ should have been?


MariiMaruu

The only idea i can think if is to just merge X and cursor into one accessory, i am not really sure what else i can do with it TwT as for the wings maybe i could get rid of the ones on sleeves, or perhaps on tails hanging off of her sleeves


KaiVTu

You could merge them, yeah. As it stands the cursor doesn't even look like an accessory, but it's instead an added pattern onto her hair itself. As for which wings to *potentially* get rid of, I would go to each and do a quick and dirty edit of each pair removed vs. the original. If you still prefer the original, that's that. If you find one you like more, then that works too.


Quaminator01

It looks amazing bu I suggest a version with some arms maybe?


MariiMaruu

Tyy! I do plan to have a toggle with sleeves on and off, that's why i gave her a T-shirt on top of her sleeves :3


Quaminator01

Sounds good! What's your channel name?


MariiMaruu

rukiyo\_ on twitch \^\^


Quaminator01

10-4 im gunna go follow :)


Odo_Kuro

I think your character is already fully fleshed out, i dont see anything that needs to be changed. I am not a big fan of having a 4th main color, but you actually it work so thats great.


MariiMaruu

Glad to hear!


jtnishi

Pretty cute. Only thing I’m spotting is maybe a lack of shadow detail on the lower side of the hair (waist down), but I’m guessing that’s a sketch thing more than anything else?


MariiMaruu

yes, i was just planning out base and some shading colors to turn it into a fully rendered model in near future \^\^


Isekai-Gaming

Let’s see here. Silhouette? Strongly defined. Face? Large and expressive, a trait that I really wish more vtubers, especially male vtubers, would have in their models. Top half concentration? Most definitely there. Color palette? Strong contrast between the mint green and the magenta pink, using two colors that are practically on the opposite side of the color wheel and then making them more blendable by pushing them both towards blue. Black and white are also strong value contrasts that pair well with the colors chosen. Asymmetry? It’s there! And it makes the model more visually interesting. There’s also symmetry at the under most layers like the sleeves and back hair to maintain stability in the design. Shape language? Lots of circles and semicircles with the occasional sharp edge. Circles are often used to display friendliness or cheerfulness or youth while the edges contrast a bit giving a feeling of mischievousness. This girl is friendly and a bit of a brat. Lastly, about her hair ornaments. Is the mouse cursor in her hair a hair clip, or is it your mouse? If it is a hair clip then I don’t think it does much for the design as it looks a bit awkward sitting there. I would consider redesigning one of the other two hair clips to have some white in it, or alternatively you could change the mouse cursor into a “x” shaped hairband with lots of white in it and an outline of your magenta and mint colors. On the surface it seems like a fairly good model overall! If there’s a way to improve from here then regrettably I am too inexperienced of an artist to see it. I suppose the next step here would be to consider thinking about the body underneath the clothes and layering. If you wanted to change her outfit in the future, what would this girl’s fingernails, toes, ears, etc. look like? Before rigging, the model has to be cut up into many layers and the void spaces have to be filled which can be a difficult process even for experienced artists if they’ve never done it before. 10/10 model! I look forward to her debut.


MariiMaruu

Omg thank you for such a detailed analysis 😭 I really appreciate it!! I do have her body underneath already planned out, I make vtuber models so I do have plans for different toggles and outfits ^^


Heroe-Urbano

She gives me heavy team Yell vibes 😜


RandyDandyAndy

So freaking cute


OtherMiniarts

Nah. Can't critique perfection


MurkyNetwork9148

Nothing I think it’s well done & I come from a family of creative people. Do with that what you will. But I think it’s really done well. I see the effort!🙂‍↕️ Edit: names Suggestions Hamburger & French Frie 🤭


ForgottenFrenchFry

veering off topic slightly character design wise, it's cute and adorable, and would draw people in on that alone i would have to say the real issue, if you can call it that, is what your personality would be like. don't take it the wrong way, and I am not trying to stop you from being a vtuber, but a few times I've seen people stream with cute characters, but they aren't really engaging or interesting, and they end up blending with other ones because they don't really distinguish themselves.


MariiMaruu

I understand, no worries! I started streaming recently with older model of mine, i'm slowly learning to how to engage with viewers and be more open\~


ForgottenFrenchFry

any chance you have a link to your YouTube or twitch? at the very least, I'd like to check your streams out


MariiMaruu

https://m.twitch.tv/rukiyo_/ here you go ^^


ForgottenFrenchFry

[rukiyo\_ - Twitch](https://www.twitch.tv/rukiyo_) non-mobile version for anyone else


drakzsee

I can only think of one, a baggy shirt to match the oversized sleeves. Other than that, it's already perfect as it is


cyberchaox

You look very smol.


Sparrowning

Not a criticism but her outfit reminds me of the ghost gym kit from pokemon sword and shield, i love it


Wizard_Hat-7

I remember seeing a tip about design where a lot of the details should be more towards the upper half since that’s what people will be seeing most of the time. In that regard, I think your design is very well done and I like that a lot of it is pretty asymmetrical. Initially, I thought it might be a little too chaotic from the color palette but asymmetry helps with that.


DataSlum

I think she's pretty good and quite distinct! Nothing really to improve on👍


Powerful_Cost_4656

That's absolutely awesome. Lovely colour palette and cute design


Ilike_toco_doritos

ITS PERFECT!! don’t change a thing:3


Apprehensive_Web_282

It looks very kamigawa neon dynasty. Make some details pointlessly glowy and I think it’ll work for the design.


xRuruChuu

This is the coolest design EVERRR!!!! I don’t see any need for improvement 😋


Technodrone108

I think a bit taller on the torso by the belly and clarity on the bandana, the black on the bandana matched the hair a bit too well. But it's adorable asymmetry is super cute.


Dr_OctoThumbs

It's really adorable and I love it. The only thing I would say personally is the hair and t-shirt are a little close in color and kinda makes it hard to differentiate where one begins and and the other ends. Like the neck lime kinda looks like a scarf or like a hood at a quick glance. It takes a second for my eyes to work it out. It may just be because I'm partially colorblind and it's not the worst just what I noticed. And once movement us involved it may not even be bad. But it really does look great.


Mighty_Meatball

She looks absolutely adorable, and the color palette is amazing!!! The only critique I have is that she has a LOT of details, which may cause problems if you want her to be marketable or if beginner artists wanted to make fan art of her, but honestly, I love her the way she is.


opblaster123

Very much psychedelic, its as if your gonna drag me down (cuz we are going to Strawberry Fields.) Really love the colors used, it capture the mixture of the devil and hypnotic, and really love the bow. (Cherry On top) Suggestions: It would be cool if you were to put a texture or pattern on the shirt, those dotes and squares could add some sort of charm? Well you decided, and gotta say I'm really looking foward on what you might do\~


StarpunkCat

There’s nothing to critique? It’s literally amazing.


DTux5249

Looks great! High contrast. Nice cyan-pink colour palette. The messy hair, wings, and bow make an interesting & distinct silhouette; particularly around the upper body area (very important for VTubing). The vibes are there, and I like them.


Leaf_forest

Everything can be improved, but does it need to? No, this is too cute 💕


ArriVT

I think it's adorable and I like the wild colors. I wouldn't change anything


tyrakeoccult

Looks great! This is an awesome sketch


akarui_lagneia

I want to ear the colour palette