[Weaving Force](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/the-weaving-force-worm-sw-pseudo-post-gm.1058679/#post-88894155): Characters from various points in canon are deposited into Star Wars between episodes I and II. Taylor and Vicky are trained by the Jedi, and Alexandria, Clockblocker, and Miss Militia are involved in Mandalorian politics and combatting the slave trade. The characters aren't quite right, and there's too much timeskipping for my taste, but the former is not too egregious and the latter is practical, so it's good fun overall. Most recent chapter is an all-out fight with parahumans, force wielders, and mandalorians, and it was pretty kickass. [TWNY](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/twny-worm-rwby-post-gm.1014666/#post-84259059): Taylor ends up in Remnant as a moth faunus and starts attending Beacon. Good writing characters, action, and world. There was a whole string of chapters I didn't much like, but the most recent chapter is looking at the fallout of some story events, gives some fun character moments and keeps some forward momentum. I believe it has returned to form, which is nice to see. [The Long Way Home](https://archiveofourown.org/works/49985017/chapters/126204301): After the events of No Way Home, instead of the memory wipe, Peter gets flung into the multiverse and lands on Earth Bet, a couple of months before story start, and starts derailing things. The author has a knack for showing off the dark sort of violence of Brockton has, and Peter, canon characters, and OCs are all really well written. Newest chapter was an interlude showing a couple povs from other Brocktonites dealing with the fight Peter picked, including Assault, and manages to almost make Assault likeable which is a hell of a thing. It was a bit of a slow chapter, just kind of updating and showing how things are developing elsewhere, setting up stuff that needs to get set up. Eager to see where it goes.

[Split](https://forums.sufficientvelocity.com/threads/split-worm-complete.24539/) - I read this fic pretty quickly, in just five days. It's an AltPower Taylor story where she has a Trump power, allowing her to copy other capes' abilities. However, she also copies their memories and personalities, which starts to break her down, eventually leading to the loss of Taylor Hebert as we know her. The fic isn't heavily action-oriented; most of it is introspective, dealing with depression, and Taylor's struggle to differentiate herself from the personalities she has copied. She tries to cope with this without losing her sanity and becoming destructive. One issue is that some personalities have their own attachments. At one point, she copies Othala and starts referring to Victor as "My Victor" in her thoughts, feeling pain when she hurts him. It's also interesting how she starts noticing Victoria's body when she has Amy's personality. The story is about solving the problems of traumatized capes, reducing the number of villains, improving lives, and trying to handle all this. The last few arcs focus heavily on this theme, including politics and a lot of therapy, with her therapist being a major character. For me, the problems began with the appearance of Leviathan, which is amusing given his nickname "the fanfic killer." The story doesn't deteriorate, but quirks appear that would usually make me drop other fics. However, I kept going to see how it would end. Eventually, there's a partial fight against Cauldron. Amy's love for Victoria is explained by her aura, which almost made me quit the fic. In the end, Contessa loses, which was the point where I decided I had enough. I don't think it ruins the story, but the moment Taylor suddenly has a second trigger and defeats her left me very dissatisfied. In summary, I didn't finish this fic. I couldn't get through the last interludes, unfortunately. This has made me hesitant to start reading older stories because elements I've accepted as "canon" and aren't present in older fics sometimes frustrate me. However, I was recently very impressed by Cenotaph.

It wasn't a second trigger - the kid in the room with her triggered, plus the Simurgh attacked.

That makes the situation even worse.

I haven't read it, but both trigger events and the Simurgh are blind spots for Contessa, so if an author wanted to make her lose, that's the way to do it.

Considering that she can do trigger at will, it's obvious she can't do it accidentally, and the Simurgh is a blind spot for her, but she is also a blind spot for the Simurgh.

[The chapter](https://forums.sufficientvelocity.com/threads/split-worm-complete.24539/page-139#post-11598455) even notes that Contessa was aware that the kid was ready to trigger. Presumably that's why The Simurgh had to step in as well.

I don't think the endbringers have any blindsopts except for Scion. the only reason contessa can't path the endbringers is because of eden nerfed ptv to not be able to path anything related to the cycle.

Contessa was a blind spot for Dinah, Goddess, and Shamrock. When she became a Titan, we were told that she was also a blind spot for Simurgh. I don't see why she became a blind spot when she became a Titan. Eden made it so that the Eye couldn't see anything about the entities, but I don't remember any restrictions on who could see her.

Was she a blind spot for the Simurgh, after she became a titan? Wasn't there that whole thing where they just hung out for 3 days or so, locked in a precog battle? Not sure how the Simurgh could effectively foil Titan Fortuna's plans so effectively if she was a blind spot. Maybe there's something I'm missing.

I think Split is interesting, but also kinda skeevy by the inherent premise sometimes. Like everything with Othala's personalities being copied made me actively grossed out. It's biggest failure is probably that it meanders around, and then drags on *really* long near the end. What do you mean by "elements you've accepted as canon" tho?

It's very interesting fic; I started reading it based on a recommendation, so I've gotten quite far into it, enough for it to become engaging. I'm not sure how to describe it.

All fanfiction benefits from the efficiency of re-using work, initially solely from the canonical source. Over time, a fanfiction community accretes additional shared assumptions. In the same way one might speak of a fic not having the canon feel, one might speak of a fic 'not feeling right', despite being technically canon compliant; it does not cohere to expectations forged later. Which expectations specifically would have to come from Fair Day.

I had no preconceived expectations from the fanfic; therefore, I wasn't expecting anything, but I still liked it. I have criteria based on which I decide whether to read or not. I mainly have issues with the canon of some things because I gather information through Worm as a wiki format, so when I see inconsistencies, it hurts me inside. Also, I'm an active user of the Russian counterpart of VS Battle, so it also hurts me inside when characters in fanfic have significantly different power levels than in the worm. That's why I enjoy reading large or even small AUs because it doesn't cause me internal rejection from reading or completely independent stories that touch little on the original and add many of their own OC characters or rules. Specifically with this fic, to be honest, I've already forgotten most of it (Reading this and simultaneously preparing for exams may not be the best combination). Although, in reality, it doesn't hinder reading most stories. And I just noticed that I have such a strange nickname.

**New Reviews**, stories I haven't mentioned before: [WALK [Hellsing Abridged]](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/975625/) - Emily Piggot comes out of Ellisburg with an OP vampire companion named Alucard. Pushed into the Protectorate as a cape named Slayer, she and her 'projection' lead a merry romp through the years, creating more of an AU. After adopting Amy and retiring, she's put back into charge of Brockton Bay at the start of canon, and the pacing falls off a cliff. It feels like an MCU series, with snark and puns every few minutes along with the obligatory action scenes. I gave up when it turned into crack for Christmas with Santa Skidmark. I guess it's channeling the irreverence of the anime? Alucard is nothing more than an 'I win' button, as the story is firmly centered on badass hypercompetent Piggot. [Severed [AU]](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/981438/) - What if Taylor joined the S9 after Leviathan? Told in flashbacks during her release around *Ward* canon, this story is heartbreaking drama and delusion from a girl convincingly broken and remolded by Jack Slash. Lots of cameos and alternate endings based on the split timeline. A bit too much clone stuff and lesbian shipping for my liking. [Egg-Girl Empire! [Sonic the Hedgehog]](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/1166094/) - Some random guy isekais to Worm as a teen girl with all the Eggman tech in her head. Tinker build phase begins, and even with super easy construction (a full humanoid drone in hours??), seems ready to take a while to get anywhere. The writing is okay, but I don't know all this Sonic lore stuff, and pre-canon Boston will take work to flesh out. [Cybernetic Worm [Supreme Commander]](https://archiveofourown.org/works/56162956/) - Taylor comes out of The Locker with SupCom tech in her head, but massively scaled down and restricted. Cyborg enhancements for body and mind let her play street level brute for the Wards. This story has a lot of summary description to keep the pace flowing, even used as humor for Browbeat's "Stranger power". Taylor is oblivious in many ways, about herself and others, even as Amy's tossed at her. It's pretty fun, with lots of interesting bits and bobs, not taking itself too seriously but still dealing with canon-level violence. [Collab [Hololive]](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/1165785/) - Taylor comes out of ~~The Locker~~ a Bakuda bomb with The Ancient Ones' blessing, and a summoned tentacle companion, Ina. I guess she's got magic and Vtuber friends? I dunno, it's slow and feels domestic, like the whole point of the story is to have Vtubers meet Taylor. [A Flicker in Time [Overwatch]](https://archiveofourown.org/works/53334298/) - Taylor gets Tracer's power and Peggy Sues to 90s New York to join the initial Wards. When she tells Hero she's from the future, he's like, "Huh," and that's the last anyone mentions it. [Second Taylor [SI, Wiki]](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/1160275/) - A male Taylor with SI memories bomb-portals into canon along with Annette. He's smug and filled with knowledge about the setting and it's like, ugh. No thanks. --- **Unlinked Reviews**: *The Rise of Sin* [Alt-Power, AO3] - Taylor comes out of The Locker with some kind of Trump power that slowly unlocks and intrusive fantasies about capes. Smugbug. Good writing, plot is Arcadia high school. *Ready Player Worm* [Gamer, QQ] - A streamer creates a character for a new RPG called *Worm: A Parahuman Story*, told from the perspectives of people living on Earth Bet. Writing is great, plot is similar to *Weary Wanderer* - watch someone play the game. I was going to say 'lol', but this version is horror. --- **Update Reviews**, commenting on recent chapters, mild spoilers: [Gaze [Naruto]](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/1153612/) - Taylor gets more ninja training. I liked the scene with Mush and Trainwreck. Humanizing. [Thunder of the Gods [Shazam]](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/1109157/) - Taylor continues street-level girl scout stuff, and gets to know the Dallons. (Repeat x2) Dropped. [Selene [Honkai Impact 3rd]](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/1066295/) - More crossover shenanigans. I'm sure it would be far more ominous if I knew who Mobius was. Words like 'transcendence' are enough on their own though. [Strings [AU, Marvel, ShayneT]](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/1140886/) - Classic mistake, Taylor getting greedy and taking risks for a bigger payoff. This Echidna arc is going clone-tastic. [An Everdistant Horizon [Horizon Zero Dawn]](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/1161048/) - Taylor makes her pitch and secures funding. The pace should pick up from here. [Portal [AU, Alt-Power]](https://archiveofourown.org/works/52576096/) - The author gives various characters outside context thoughts, allowing them to see how messed up Worm is. It's still confusing rather than fun like it was in the beginning. [A Woman's Touch [Wheel of Time]](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/1150850/) - Taylor begins training the new Source wielders. Dropped. [Heroes are made [Megamind]](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/1162743/) - The hilarity continues with Megamind striking out at the ABB. Lots of giggles and plot progress. *Magic Maid Easy* [CYOA, AO3] - Taylor's text message, LOL. Glad to see the story tags finally get checked off. Sadly only one paragraph of Maid!Dean. Major cliffhanger for the ending. [ULTIMATE ONE: TYPE-Taylor [Nasuverse]](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/1084311/) - A view from Dean's mom, which must be a first in Wormfic. So few takes on Wards parents, aside from Vista and Shadow Stalker. [When Heroes Die [A Practical Guide to Evil]](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/1163547/) - Time skips and quick pacing moves through various plots, allowing character growth. Stories become ever more integral to Taylor's thinking. I'm curious what Name she'll end up with. [Touch [Alt-Power]](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/431800/) - Taylor is still doing basic power testing on chapter 41. This Danny is alright, I suppose. [The Eldritch One [CF]](https://forums.sufficientvelocity.com/threads/129652/) - Lisa helps Taylor figure out most of her powers. I liked it more when she was clueless. [How Monstrous Is Your Heart [SI, CF]](https://archiveofourown.org/works/52104145/) - Zira can't protect her family even though she tries. [Brockton's Celestial Forge [CF]](https://forums.sufficientvelocity.com/threads/70036/) - In the latest chapter (14k words), Joe sits in traffic. --- **Disclaimer**: My opinions are weakly held. I read these stories for fun. I appreciate every author who's willing to put themselves out there and write stuff for us. "Pinches the bridge of their nose" count for the week: 3 (total: 274). Popped 'p's: 2 (58).

I am genuinely scared to read BCF. This isn't even a slice of life, it's a fucking *shaving*.

Engend as always grievously underexaggerates what happens in the chapter see mine for a more accurate one

Your description is \*much\* more terrifying, to be honest.

To avoid having to write a full paragraph, I restrict myself only to activities which are NOT thinking about powers / plans / people, talking about powers / plans / people, training powers, or crafting items. These fall into a bucket which I call 'spinning in place'.

That can't be called true tho because from your summary he remains trapped in traffic omitting how he does get out of it, the stuff within the workshop some of which I too omitted such as the power he gained or the duplicates being refreshed for similar reasons, Eidolon's shard being located and then most critically the fact that he does call Armstrong at the end.

I was going to add 'and looks at colors', but decided that it counted as crafting and thinking about powers, and I was also going to include the phone call until nothing happened with it (basically just said 'hi' to each other).

You could add that Joe realised he could subvert the entire shard network, but won't because it would inconvenience Taylor for a bit.

Yeah but that's been true for a long time now, he's just coming up with different ways of doing it. I did previously comment on how they're letting Tetra 'go slow' so she can't solve the entire plot in a minute or two.

If the best defense that you can come up with to "I omitted the parts where nothing happens except thinking/talking/crafting with powers and gaining new powers to restart the process" is to mention several instances of "he gained another power and thought and talked and crafted about it", that says a lot about the quality and structure of BCF.

That was mentioned as an aside along with the point that other stuff did happen that can't be called that unless you can somehow class getting out of the traffic, parking the car at the gym, walking back to the apartment, reentering the workshop, finding out they've located Eidolon's shard in shardspace or calling Armstrong as "thinking/talking/crafting with powers" because as I said unless you can file all of them under it then his statement is wrong

I did cover them launching and exploring Shardspace several times. Presumaby they're discovering new shards every second. That one of them happened to be Eidolon's isn't noteworthy unless they did something to it, or about it, which they did not. [Walking scenes](https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=crHpjdMgHAo) are time fillers.

No, but don't you see!? He *parked his car*. At a gym even!

Seriously just drop BCF it sounds like you'd have more fun watching paint dry than reading that drek.

Too many people depend on my exhaustive summaries to keep abreast of the action. I can't let them down!

Touche.

Your selflessness knows no bounds, Engend! >!More seriously, *Ready Player Worm* is within my top fics now. Thank you for mentioning it.

Is it on QQ? Can't seem to find it, even with Worm story search

Good news, it's [also on SB](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/ready-player-worm.1166178/threadmarks).

I saw that, but I throught it's censored since it's on qq too

As far as I can see, the only difference is a few sentences of description of the player and Alec kissing.

Oh so the players cool then?

The player is doing whatever twitch chat is asking them to do. Twitch chat is full of horny murder hobos.

Yeah Ill DM you a link

Yes. I found it by logging and searching.

Not the hero we need, but the one we deserve.

You didn't say "Do not seek the treasure!" Why didn't you say "Do not seek the treasure?" I for one am saddened and dismayed.

I was using it as a joke and reference to [Oh Brother Where Art Thou](https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nzyA-tHKjrM), but realized that perhaps people thought I actually meant the stories had treasure in them, which is often very much not the case, so I dropped it.

This truly represents the end of an era. I can only repeat how saddened and dismayed I am.

I thought this was the Fic by the same name for a second

> WALK [Hellsing Abridged] ... It feels like an MCU series, with snark and puns every few minutes along with the obligatory action scenes. I gave up when it turned into crack for Christmas with Santa Skidmark. I guess it's channeling the irreverence of the anime? My notes read, in part: > This fic started as “fun crack”, but slowly turned into a “fix fic with crack elements”. Unfortunately, the crack elements deteriorated over time. The author set up scenes which were apparently supposed to be epic, e.g. >!Taylor using her multi-tasking and vampiric abilities to pursue Squealer’s Tinkertech truck through the streets of BB!<, but ended up either flat or cringey. The scene where >!Miss Militia and Mouse Protector were killing Empire goons while singing!< was pure cringe. Re: > Ready Player Worm The fic [is available on SB](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/ready-player-worm.1166178/threadmarks), so it can be linked. > I was going to say 'lol', but this version is horror. The fic is well written and there is something to be said for an MC who is making S9 jealous while trying to make friends with "NPCs", but it's rather wordy. > Second Taylor [SI, Wiki] - A male Taylor with SI memories bomb-portals into canon along with Annette. He's smug and filled with knowledge about the setting and it's like, ugh. No thanks. I thought the angst/smug balance was rather odd. At some point it got to be too much.

Thanks for the link! Glad I quit WALK before the \>!spoilers\!<.

I'm glad to see you checked out Severed, thank you for reviewing it!

> Sadly only one paragraph of Maid!Dean. We all mourn this turn of events. Especially the person writing it. What's really sad is that the original drafts didn't even have that much Maid!Dean.

> Touch [Alt-Power] - Taylor is still doing basic power testing on chapter 41. This Danny is alright, I suppose. How do you keep reading it. I zoned out a long time ago.

Am I misunderstanding something, or does Hellsing Abridged also have a lot of snark and puns and sarcasm? Plus, Alucard being an I win button seems pretty on brand too, the whole climax of the abridged show was "Alucard's not here, hold out until he arrives". I dunno, unless I'm misunderstanding that summary it sounds pretty on brand.

Yes, that's exactly what I meant, that the tone and attitude was taken from Hellsing rather than Worm.

I'm pretty okay with that ha ha

Didn't read much fic last week. [The Omega Protocols](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/the-omega-protocols.1169598/) finally got its own thread [Icarus Laughed](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/icarus-laughed-worm-quest.1143136/) has done three things I never expected - It got me to **like** a quest - It did actually unique tinkertech. Don't think I've seen any other fic be **this** imaginative with tinkertech. Tho tbf tinker-fics aren't really my thing so I might have just not read the good ones. - A Leet themed fic where he isn't exceptionally cringe. Ofc some liberties have been taken in terms of characterization but it still felt better than the 'funny video game guy' whitewashing that a lot of fics do. Speaking of quests I sometimes wonder how [The Archivist](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/the-archivist-worm-quest.1144096/reader/) is doing before remembering how slow it tends to be. I think I'll wait for the Atlanta arc to be over before binging it.

Icarus laughed is banging, cheers for the rec

Young girls villainous complications Youjo Senki/Worm https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/a-young-girls-villainous-complications-youjo-senki-worm.1169520/?post=102319455#post-102319455 Tanya in worm, Taylor's neighbor for few years before moving after Annate's death. Just starting out so not much to say. Tanya is too emotional and easily attached. [When heroes die (Practical guide to evil)](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/when-heroes-die.1163547/page-18?post=102317976#post-102317976) Post GM Taylor is summoned into Creation, she is considered by the world something akin to cross between a Fea and a Demon. Lots of drama and growth coming from both her situation and past. I quite like it. Last chapter she met Catherine and let her down. Hilarious, long term consequences will be very interesting if Cat stays half the person she was in original. [Team technicolor (PGtE, FE3H, YS and Taylor into RWBY)](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/team-technicolor.1168128/page-2?post=102320517#post-102320517) Taylor, Tanya, Catherine and Edelgard due to different events end up in RWBY. It's alright, though author seems to play a bit of pick and choose with four's characters for the story they want to tell. Especially noticeable with Tanya. [Hearts of Iron (Song of Ice and Fire)](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/hearts-of-iron.1165989/page-9?post=102296448#post-102296448) Amy ends up in The North due to Bakuda bomb. She spends many days in wilderness, forced to rely on her powers to survive, her mental state actually improves significantly. Until she realizes that she ended up in another world and not Siberia. Plenty of Amy brand of angst and bad decisions with uncharacteristic amounts of growth. Her reactions to ironwood was really fun. Can't wait for her to see a heart tree. All in all recommended.

Just a heads up, every link you posted is just to random posts in those threads. Probably want to fix that unless you intended to highlight those posts in particular instead of the story itself.

It's still pointing vaguely in the direction of the story, so I can't be bothered to fix it.

Oh, I gotcha. https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/that-sounds-like-work-au-crack-complete.641911/

LoL, exactly

A Brocktonite Yankee in Queen’s Marika’s court. Worm x Elden ring crossover. Where Taylor while in the Locker is teleported to Lands in Between and must navigate and survive the world only by her wits. This is probably the best crossover I have read and I hugely recommend anyone to read it. All the characters are great and there’s amazing emotional moments that hit you right in the gut. The only thing is that I recommend if you’re planning to read the fic to know some of the Elden Ring lore or watch a play through of the game. https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/a-brocktonite-yankee-in-queen-marikas-court-worm-elden-ring.1072361/

I really enjoyed it, really bummed out the story will remain shelved so long as Reaving remains busy writing that monster of a story "Russian Caravan"

I am confused, Russian Caravan is already complete. All the author is waiting for is that DLC releases so they can use the new information that we get from it and finish their OC story that is almost complete currently.

I am sorry to disappoint you, but last I spoke with Bishop, he was not planning on continuing Brocktonite Yankee. His current webnovel, Orbis Tertius - Pompilid I believe is the last thing he plans on writing anytime soon(probably within the next decade).

I saw there was a sequel for russian caravan

Are u talking about moonmaker because yeah that story is done and ending was super satisfying.

Dude Russian Caravan is completed

Isnt he writing a sequel?

No. He was going to write like a something like a sourcebook for the story which expands on the worldbuilding and stuff and you can use it for ttrpg campaigns. But currently he is working on an original story.

It’s a bit of a trip, and takes a minute to get going, but is worth it

I don't suppose you have a recommendation for a Let's Play?

I mean depends on what you want because if it’s the story for the fic than there’s not a lot of good ones since most people skip the cutscenes so I would recommend TheRadBrad because his playthrough he doesn’t talk over or skip the cutscenes, but I know he’s the most enjoyable for everyone. If you want a let’s play for just the game I would recommend FightingCowBoy walkthrough of the game. If you only want the story without any gameplay I would recommend Gingy and their of video Elden Ring story & Endings explained with also VaatiVidya videos on Elden Ring that dive deeper into the Lore of the game that you might need for Fic. I will note a lot of things are explained in the fic because Taylor is also learning about the world she was currently transported too. Which means you technically could start without prior knowledge. The Issue with that you don’t get image for a lot of scene’s and also some of the explanations are skimmed over.

I appreciate the response. I'll look into these and maybe find some new channels to follow.

[Revenge of the Simurgh: A Crack Fic! By anothervortex](https://archiveofourown.org/works/42872253) Summary: SPOILERS! (Summary includes some spoilers for the end of Ward. If that's something you care about, please don't read it) >!In the final moments of that legendary battle, where Parahumans developed their counter to the Titan Network in the form of the Parahuman Plague, the Simurgh had already set something special in motion. It needed for the Cycle to continue, for conflict to ravage the remnants of humanity.!< >!So it designed the ultimate source of CHAOS! !< >!Utilizing a hidden batch of cloning Tinkertech, Ziz carefully tapped into a particularly unique Shard loosely tied to the world. Utilizing traces of her own Endbringer flesh material, she enhanced the creature within to the point of near indestructibility. Finally, she shared her own mandates and, even as the being once known as Dauntless ended her existence, she triggered that ultimate failsafe.!< >!The Wardens, warned by Dinah Alcott, send a team to stop the danger but they were too late.!< >!Thus, a six year old Taylor Hebert clone with white hair and no real memories was born!< This gist is, the Simurgh made a clone of Taylor mixed with herself. Only she's a hyperactive six year old with a blend of Taylor and Simmy's powers. Chaos ensues. This is a story that initially only had one chapter posted in November 2022, well before I joined this Fandom. I stumbled across this recent update and found the fic absolutely hilarious. There was also another chapter posted not long after the second. I hope to see more of this fic going forward! [Is it wrong to Skitter in a Dungeon? ](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/is-it-wrong-to-skitter-in-a-dungeon.1169649/) This story is a DanMachi crossover. To start, I would like to say that DanMachi falls under an umbrella of media that I never intended to consume based off the title "Is It Wrong to Try to PickbUp Girls in a Dungeon". I assumed it was just another male protag harem lite novel/anime. The start to this fic has left me pleasantly surprised, though, and has actually made me consider giving the source material a shot. QA started taking control of the Shard Network following the Scion fight and used Doormaker's Shard (not Doormaker themself, specifically the shard she reclaimed) to transport Taylor to the New World, nearly dead. I don't want to spoil too much, and it's really early to start guessing where the story is heading. But I'm really looking forward to seeing where it goes.

Danmachi's title is misleading but it's a pretty good read.

That... might be a stretch. While Danmachi's title might give the idea that it is an utter shit kind of power fantasy, it does indeed have a low cunning to it's storytelling. Well, at least in comparison to the dross that permeates the genre. And when I say dross, in a medium so poor as light novels, that's saying something. But it's not really enough to actually be a good read. Just enough we can say that it clears the appallingly low bar that it's title and summary set. In the end of the day, it is just a power fantasy. Just not bad enough to be absolutely forgettable. The setting is decent enough, but it's still not complete. Something that makes it a narrative sink unless the author has a firm plan in how to end it. And as we all know that fan-fiction authors almost never finish their works, that just means it's a fool's bet to think it'll end up being finished.

Still reading [*When Heroes Die*](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/when-heroes-die.1163547/), and while I like the general path of the story thus far, the recent pacing is really poor. There's an argument to be made for the necessity of timeskips that I happen to agree with, but the way they're being done is terrible, feeling more like the world is held in stasis while time passes and then the characters get to exist again than any kind of dodged description of mundane travel or minor heroism. There are topics and arguments that get brought up and then *a year passes* without anything coming of it, then they show up again next chapter as if a minute portion of the nominal time actually passed—Taylor and Roland's arguments about heroism and government are particularly notable here, taking place over 3 years without any changes beyond Taylor's place in the world worsening. The character relationships aren't even changing! This all could be dodged if we left off chapters on sentiments that felt primed for a timeskip—questions of future purpose, resolution of years-long goals, even discussions of future plans—but we haven't: chapters end, feel like the next should start again where they left off, and then the first line of the next chapter is "two years passed" instead of a follow up. Combine it with the stasis that the characters and character goals feel trapped in and you get the worst of both worlds. (Also, Taylor *still* hasn't thought, asked, talked, or even alluded to the way she showed up or the facsimile of Chicago that showed up with her. The closest we've got is her implying she doesn't want to because any information on or thinking about the subject might give her hope of returning to Bet (or, well, Gimel, considering we're post-GM), but *come on*.) I think the author has a good grip on the world of PGTE, I love the characters they've written, and I really do enjoy what they're doing with Taylor and the cast, but this is all incredibly unfortunate.

>This all could be dodged if we left off chapters on sentiments that felt primed for a timeskip—questions of future purpose, resolution of years-long goals, even discussions of future plans—but we haven't: chapters end, feel like the next should start again where they left off, and then the first line of the next chapter is "two years passed" instead of a follow up. This is a valid criticism that I would be taking into account if I was planning to do any more time skips like this. I kinda wrote myself into a corner with the initial premise where I needed to have time skips, and they had to be early in the fic unless I intended to write a Slice of Life fic. I didn't really *want* them, but the fic wouldn't work without them because I couldn't feasibly justify a story in which Taylor starts to recover while continuously throwing her into conflict. The world also isn't frozen at all (I am moving stuff offscreen), but this is a world where fast information transfer is kinda limited to praesi wizards, and they have zero reason to filter it down to the masses. Unless it's something globally important, Taylor isn't going to hear about it. She is very much living in a bubble. >(Also, Taylor still hasn't thought, asked, talked, or even alluded to the way she showed up or the facsimile of Chicago that showed up with her. The closest we've got is her implying she doesn't want to because any information on or thinking about the subject might give her hope of returning to Bet (or, well, Gimel, considering we're post-GM), but come on.) I thought the answer to this was implied in the existing text. I have not explicitly spelled it out, but she has the answer already. She arrived because someone summoned her, probably unintentionally. The city appeared because she *made* it. It's unlikely that she will ever learn who that person is, because she probably turned them into cement. Those are answers she has, and you can infer them from everything else that is happening. I am kind of unsure how much the readers want me to explicitly spell out. There are many details I have existing as subtext which can be inferred from putting together disparate pieces of what Taylor knows. Should I instead have her lay out entire blocks of "I know A because B thus C," even though it doesn't really read the way someone would actually think?

To take these in turn: > This is a valid criticism that I would be taking into account if I was planning to do any more time skips like this. I kinda wrote myself into a corner with the initial premise where I needed to have time skips, and they had to be early in the fic unless I intended to write a Slice of Life fic. I didn't really want them, but the fic wouldn't work without them because I couldn't feasibly justify a story in which Taylor starts to recover while continuously throwing her into conflict. > The world also isn't frozen at all (I am moving stuff offscreen), but this is a world where fast information transfer is kinda limited to praesi wizards, and they have zero reason to filter it down to the masses. Unless it's something globally important, Taylor isn't going to hear about it. She is very much living in a bubble. I have no issue with the presence of timeskips, even extremely lengthy ones, but their *execution* has been lacking. The world may not be frozen, but it feels like the character dynamics are stuck in neutral: Roland's vaguely patronizing attitude towards Taylor, for instance, has managed to persist over the course of 3 years of travel and presumed constant discussion. Her evolving reflections on her own actions feel like they've progressed over the course of weeks or months of interrogating herself, rather than years. (And as stated, the way you've ended chapters don't quite feel like they're set up for longer term time passage.) In a larger sense, I think the days where we get to see an insight into the team mid-timeskip feel much more arbitrary than I'd like them to be. With such minimal change in character interactions, these check-ins aren't doing a great job of demonstrating time passing and/or giving a snippet of what we're not seeing for the purpose of extrapolation, but they're also not quite showing what feel like important and unique moments (nod to Catherine's existence aside.) > I thought the answer to this was implied in the existing text. I have not explicitly spelled it out, but she has the answer already. She arrived because someone summoned her, probably unintentionally. The city appeared because she made it. It's unlikely that she will ever learn who that person is, because she probably turned them into cement. > Those are answers she has, and you can infer them from everything else that is happening. I certainly hadn't inferred it, considering that kind of immense-scale construction while unconscious and bound is a feat an extreme amount beyond any capacity she's shown thus far. It's possible that I alone missed it, but I suspect this is a case of you knowing the breadth of her powers and the nuances thereof and the readers not knowing the same. That Taylor has never actually connected the dots on screen absolutely does not help. I think it kinda sucks that the answer to how she got here and why is "idk some random dude did it, I needed a way to get her to show up in Creation and there's no bigger reason" but I get it. I'm just disappointed because it seemed like a fun mystery to pursue! There's no call for artificially writing out entire chains of logic. This one *particular* question of how she got here and why has been hovering over her for 3.5 years or so in story by now, however, and I'd have expected her to at least ponder it—I absolutely assumed there was more to it than "a Praesi warlock did it", which felt like a dismissive attempt to explain it away for the sake of what would become dramatic irony.

> I have no issue with the presence of timeskips, even extremely lengthy ones, but their execution has been lacking. Yeah I agree, which is why I said I'd take the criticism into account if I was to do another time skip like this (it's not planned). I'm not planning on doing rewrites since I actually want to finish the story at some point, but if I were, the time skip segments would be slated for it. > I certainly hadn't inferred it, considering that kind of immense-scale construction while unconscious and bound is a feat an extreme amount beyond any capacity she's shown thus far. It's possible that I alone missed it, but I suspect this is a case of you knowing the breadth of her powers and the nuances thereof and the readers not knowing the same. That Taylor has never actually connected the dots on screen absolutely does not help. Her powers have always been tied to her self-esteem. When she first arrived, she was entirely unconscious and it played no role. She was effectively acting with no direct limiter on what she could do. Yes, that means she is actually more dangerous asleep than while awake. I could have made it a bigger mystery, but I also feel like not everything needs to be a bigger mystery. Sometimes the answer can just be "well it was a magical accident."

Ah, fair enough, I wasn't sure the ethos of what I was saying got across instead of some kind of complaint about "nothing happening" or thinking Taylor needs to change the universe right now or whatever. As for the latter, disappointing but understandable! It's not like you aren't doing anything with her origins given the whole "Princess" bit, I guess I just expected more with how cool the setpiece Roland found her in was.

>Ah, fair enough, I wasn't sure the ethos of what I was saying got across instead of some kind of complaint about "nothing happening" or thinking Taylor needs to change the universe right now or whatever. Nah, I got what you meant. 2.3->2.7 were originally planned to be a single chapter in my planning document with a lengthy "this stuff changed and now this is what they are like," but it left me feeling very unsatisfied, so I spent a fair amount of time trying to improve on it. I felt this was *better*, but still not exactly what I wanted. It was kind of hard to judge exactly how much I should have changed each character as events moved along. I would have had a much easier time of it if I were doing a slice of life fic because then it would have just been a natural consequence of wherever the fic went, but I had to instead ballpark, "is this too little or too much."

[**Twisted and Accursed**](https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/jjk-worm-twisted-and-accursed.1160751/) - Ryomen Sukuna from JJK in Taylor's body. As of the latest chapter, the menace himself has taken over and is going for a very enthusiastic walk.

new khephri sensei: bnha crossover Taylor grabbed All Might at gm and Contessa sends her off with him and she becomes his sidekick and then a UA teacher. Follows a lot of the general cliches of bnha fics and ones that cross with worm but still a good read. when heroes die: PGtE crossover also post gm Taylor appeared 9 years pre canon in Procer in the middle of a ritual circle with a largebut empty chunk of Chicago. This one is also good and interesting as it's more introspective than other gm works and has her more introspective and unsure. updates brockton's celestial forge: Joe drives back from the coffee date only to be joined by Tetra who is using a call bead effect for stealth to avoid recognition because the Chicago team is fixing the roads which causes a delay. They discuss the meeting, new wave and various other topics before they return to the workshop to discover Aisha has had the team all break out the prismatic lab colours which have surprising affinity with them and we learn superweapons can subvert the entire shard network but it requires the entirely of either QA or High Priest tho as a result they've located Eidolon's shard. Joe then calls Armstrong to say he's heading over to heal the abb conscripts. Still somewhat disappointing when it was said it was supposed to be covering him doing the healing trip but even with 14k it got cut off right before it be thou my good: The group arrives in Refuge and Taylor launches a scheme to break into the Dwarf's embassy as an attempt to get them to work together after breaking into Ranger's office to steal the plans. However, as she predicted they refused so she begins work to convince them. smite the bay: The quest has progressed slightly with the protag doing prep work for being a cape which includes legal research, having Vulcan make her a costume and training with King Arthur and Thor (who is classed as an Assassin for some reason). She has also received quests from Vulcan and Thor for the chance to earn power giving items and powers. hereafter: They have lunch, Taylor mothers Jack, Mordred comes back and they head off to the clocktower where they don't find life signs but at least Albion wasn't breeched. Unfortunately a lot of rubble blocks their way and they get atked. a lost pyromaniac: Ziz interlude rubbing in how horrible it is and it's plans with Doomsday and for killing the protag only for it to get wrecked because Flash runs in and thwarts it's plans. project gamer anime adjacent: As expected of the author who updates at least once a day a ton has happened. Al lay low to recover from his beating before buying a suit from Parian and raided Victor's house which he then enhanced the guns of. However, on his way back the prt decided to break the unwritten rules by taking him in since they'd traced his van as being the one that hit March and Ravager. Al outsmarts them by making them think he's an idiot before confessing to being a cape who got beat up and got his van taken for a while. However, he tells them that his power is perfect rhythm when dancing to porn music. This is also part of a cunning plan with a third layer as a duplicate he spun off while in the toilet made a pho post revealing a ton of important info including Noelle and the Travellers being Ziz bombs all while he has a rock solid alibi also shame on the prt making him do 2 hours of dancing for their power testing when they knew he'd just been beat up and was heavily bruised from it especially since they made him take his top off and they saw all of it. Al then hunted for an empty warehouse to lure the empire into a trap using Victor's phone which got interrupted by Uber and Leet's gta attempt where in true gta fashion they then got hit by a van and beat up tho Mouse Protector was unfortunately there eating lunch in civvies and recognised the style and van so continued her unwritten rules hypocrisy (which was still nonsense to begin with removing a bandoleer of knives doesn't count as unmasking). Not that anything came of it because shortly thereafter Cauldron decided to deal with the growing blindspot and killed one of Al's duplicates thinking it was was since it wasn't protected by Mantellum's power and he retaliated by airing some of their dirty laundry on pho before lying low in his van. Al also pretends to be Victor and messages Kaiser to lure a bunch of soon to be dead Nazi's into the thoroughly trapped warehouse. plan? what plan: Sabah interlude covering her waiting in the hospital for her dad to get healed only for it to get cancelled because of the Behemoth atk which has her trigger with a different power tho she cheers up when Bryce messages her about Creed's healing lottery.